I think what he likes about race cars is that he knows when he sits down to watch a race the car that goes around the track the fastest and is in front of the pack when the race is over is the winner. It's pretty simple to understand. Cars that crash or have other troubles lose. The track is crucial in this sport. It's the pathway to victory and the only way to win. The pathway to concise writing, however, isn't quite so clear.
Sometimes topics can become lost or drive off the track. For instance, look at this sentence.
And therefore, for those who love cars, in the Southern states, since they were kids, NASCAR is the ultimate in racing.
The topic is "NASCAR is the ultimate in racing," but it is buried behind three other topics: those who love cars, the South, and since they were kids. Readers like clear topics. Those topics are usually the subject or "player" of the sentence. Here's a clear sentence.
NASCAR is the ultimate in racing especially for those who live in the South and have followed the sport since they were kids.
The topic is front and center. Sentences following can develop other aspects of the topic by delving into why the sport is so popular in the south and how even the very young love racing.
Most readers struggle with long convoluted sentences. They are anxious to find the topic and learn more about it. They want to follow a clear pathway. The goal of a writer is to keep the topic on the racetrack so the reader has an enjoyable time. If the topic becomes hidden and drives off the track, the reader will get lost and the writer will lose them.
Does this mean you have to write boring sentences? Of course, not. But it does mean your sentences need to relate and flow naturally.
Clear sentences may seem too simple for some writers, but a more simple sentence structure will help a story finish on a checkered flag and win over readers.
Okay, so where did I go off track? What's a good rule you use in writing to keep your sentences focused and your topic clear?